Hurts to Be Forgotten
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Since writing this story, a lot has changed. I've grown as a writer and editor, and the story has been heavily revised. It will be submitted to a mainstream market and find a second life there, hopefully.
Come and check out some of my other work at www.jasminearch.com, or if you feel like hanging out with a bunc of crazy writers, come and hang out at The INKubator.
Hugs
Tiny
Ah, Tiny, this is beautifully written. It's a take I would never have considered and an ending that I never expected. A little more brutal than the rest of the story implied!
Excellent stuff, a tale well told :)
Good luck!
Edit - and thanks for the mention!
After getting to know more of your writing, I value your opinion even more. Thank you so much, John. And you're welcome! ;-)
Never saw that end coming! Such a cool idea for a futuristic story.
And thank for the shout out! <3
Why thank you, kind sir. Fans face. You will make me blush!
realy love 'That motherflagging bitch'
greetings
Thank you, Jack!
your welcome
This turned out excellent; great work! Feels much more complete with the strong ending you've added.
Your VR therapy has evoked a lot of interesting thoughts. Really like your entry Tiny.
Thank you, AK!
Wow I love the themes you included here!
Thank you!
This is such a believable future scenario, Tiny. But you really got me with that ending- Ahhhg! Excellent work!
Thanks, Trishie! Hugs
Awesome writing, Tiny. I'm really glad that you shared this story this morning in PYPT. Loved every motherflagging word. Like @jrswab, I was not expecting that ending. Brilliant. Now following you and look forward to checking out your steemshelf.
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Mo
Thank you do much, mo. Hugs
This is such a beautiful and devastating story, @tinypaleokitchen. The unexpected twist at the end was a huge surprise. Wonderfully done! Oh, and I love the explanation of your invented curse word! Very clever.
Thank you, Jayna! Glad you liked it.
Mierenneukers would be an interesting word for the English speaking community to pronounce LOL. Great story, nice twist.
If you like long, Dutch words, I've got plenty more where that came from. ;-)
Haha. You and me both. I'm Dutch, from Tilburg. 😉
Aaaaah nice. Fist bump. Dan kunnen wij tegen elkaar op vloeken gelijk een tempelier!
Haha. Fist bumping all all the way back 😉 Ik wist niet dat tempeliers veel vloeken lol. Kijk: weer wat bij geleerd. Dutch cursing is cool, but the Flemish versions are better!
Well, we Belgians are fairly modest, but we are great at three things: Brewing beer, making fries, and cursing. Motherflagging nanofucker! ;-)
Hahaha. Yeah, couldn't agree with you more. Your cursing is not only awesome, it's the funniest. Making fries: yup yup, but you forgot the mayonnaise...AWESOME!!! And the beer? Well, the best beers in the world are from Belgium. Since I live in Ireland, I really miss the Dubbele Trappist (met grenadine, omdat ik een watje ben) and Kriek!!! And your motherflagging nanofucker is awesome, why don't you motherflag it yourself? LOL
Tiny, the ending works even better this way, but the set up before it is what makes it.
Thank you, Andrew. Your opinion means the world to me. I'm glad I managed to write something that's not a tearjerker for a change.