Finish the Fiction Story Contest - Week #37 - @bananafish

in #finishthestory6 years ago (edited)

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Lucid Dream
by @f3nix

There it was. An immense sphere, soaked in the amniotic liquid of the lucid dream. An embryo of edges, curves, dimensions, and impossible geometries. Static and fluid at the same time, iridescent, elusive and hypnotic in its eternal becoming.

There it was. After the struggle and the debris. There it was. Yoh's conscience.

Strung like pearls, millennia had relegated it to a mere legend, while Yoh raged freely on Earth. The existence of the conscience on a deep and subtle plane had been denied by the Master Demiurges, who originally created the source code. Their self-fulfilling prophecy had become inexorable, relegating Yoh's conscience first to the status of children's fable and then to nothingness. It had slept for a long, long time.

There, on board of the DDG-31/DD-936 Decatur, drifting in the outer space, Ethan had plenty of time for being instructed by the orbital station's A.I. about the possible effects on him of Yoh's conscience sudden epiphany.

It was not a God but it got close. This implied that the disintegration of the self, on all the planes of existence, was a more than spontaneous and probable event, as someone reached its proximity.

A sound of laborious ants interrupted Ethan’s astonished musings. The meta-viewer force fields were working around him incessantly, raising the programmed shields.

The mere sight of its unstable geometries would have been fatal for him. The neural system of his exoskeleton was crackling and working hard, at the edge of its computing power, to prevent the involuntary assimilation. Now he found himself immersed in a bath of waves that could have slipped him into oblivion instantly if he had not activated all the exoskeleton’s guard levels.

He felt like an infinitesimal dipteran, imprisoned in a dense amber atmosphere.

The Conscience's voices suddenly whipped Ethan's synapses like a thousand organ pipes in unison. He fell to his knees, eyes wide open and incredulous: no A.I. could ever have prepared him for this.

"I am. I happen. By dreaming, I have sung the creation of infinite worlds. Are you a Master?"

Ethan recorded the strange question, slowly taking courage. Standing up on his trembling legs, he pulled off his helmet and shouted:

"Conscience of Yoh, I am not a Master. I am the last of your creations, forgotten in your long sleep".

A deafening, golden silence.

As the most intimate essence of each cell began to evaporate through his cybernetic shell, Ethan frantically sought one last thought.

My Entry:

For some strange reason Ethan’s last frantic thought landed on Thanksgiving Day, at his in-laws place in Detroit, Michigan.

In the morning they’d all enjoyed watching the Lions play the Bears at Ford Field.

On the car ride back home, they had all felt defeated except Uncle Buck who kept burping “Da Bears”.

As they neared the driveway to the house, Ethan’s brother-in-law said, “If we all convert to Islam the Lions will have to change their team colors to match that of the wild beast that roams the Sahara.”

Uncle Buck burped, “Da Bears!”

While Ethan shook his head in amazement. Sitting shotgun he met the eyes of his father-in-law and for a moment felt the bond of his follow Christian.

They all kept drinking in the house as the women folk talked on and on in the kitchen fussing over the Thanksgiving Dinner. Only Ethan’s brother-in-law didn’t drink any alcohol, he just sat in the corner of the living room reading the Quran while the Cowboys played the Redskins.

Ethan went outside at halftime to smoke a cigarette and his brother-in-law joined him.

“What’s with all this Islamic shit?” Ethan asked a little inebriated.

“Look brother, its all about finding God in the end. It doesn’t matter if you’re a Christian or into Islam. The manifestation of God in and of itself becomes the single goal we all strive to achieve, just a different slant man.”

“What?” Ethan said and pounded his Bud Light. He would need some more soon.

“Think of death for example. My new religion teaches me that death only happens when it is meant to happen. You cannot die unless it is your time to die. Only your time to die is destined and cannot be cheated. It’s concepts like that my faith wants to follow.”

That conversation stayed with Ethan all through his early years in the Air Force, continued with his acceptance into Astronaut training school, and finally until this moment with the Conscience of Yoh.

And as the Conscience of Yoh with God like powers began to dissolve his physical self, he felt conflicted. Did he not believe that his death at this time had somehow been prearranged? Written in the stars so to speak as prophecy, destined? He couldn’t help to feel it true.

And yet, did that now make him Islamic?

He had always meant to die with his boots on as a follower of Christ ready to kneel at the cross. Only this death, in this manner, with his stupid brother-in-law’s speech in his mind, left him speechless as his final thought lead him to the Quran.

Thank you,
Cyrus Emerson

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Although I am very glad to be bestowed a false title, I am not indeed the prompt writer. But fancy yah that yah think I am the @f3nix and thinking @f3nix is a stand-in for me. Hue, I want to pride thee, but unfortunately me and Dr. @f3nix are two seperate people and so I request thee to fix that minor lil' error.

Now unto to the ending, must say yah flash-backed pretty well. To bring us to oure modern conditions and make the readers in the USA feel antsy of being called out to act a bit their roles without their participation. Or to say really: to recall a similar moment and see it displayed without their biases. Though fortunate yer to poke the Amerikans, the rest of the World will have to use similar moments of sport fanaticism as a stand-in for this American Football (or "throw the pigskin" game that isn't rugby) fanaticism moment.

Unto a more serious discussion: religion. I thought, despite the cultural obscenity it is to bring religion to a superficially cathartic moment of sport fanaticism, that the background played as both convenient and a juxtaposing medium. Convenient that it behaved the newly created setting with seriousness, and juxtaposing that the serious conversation of religion definitely conflicted with the juvenile-ness of sport's fanaticism. And these two gel just perfectly to make believable the ready acceptance of the message, why?

Why? Because the lil' religious message comes straight outta nowhere and there's lil' time to contemplate the message when one was ready to experience sport fanaticism that night. With lil' time to deject the message, Ethan was forced to accept it and think it over no matter how much he would/should/could detest the message and discard it. Which only gets compounded at the end where he's dying and gets to think one last thought to ease the pain.

Yet one could be clever and say the memory was emotionally taxing, and I reply with "ah, a dysfunction, perfect." And I would say that Ethan rather suffer something less painful as to avoid the life-changing pain he's experiencing every second of last moments of life. He has no more time to weep, no more time to say ow and no more time to escape. He's stuck and he has to make due, so the dysfunction is there as an aversion to, or a desire to avoid, experiencing death first-hand. This type of dysfunction is literally the death-bed sequence, to remember something to ease the passage to the eternal slumber. And now basically I have a contemporary literature example to explain a dysfunction.

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Ha ha. Southern Baptist and the like hold no place in European lore yet embedded in the memory of the old west in the sand and cactus of American mythology.

You provoked some further thoughts to offer you.

The topic of spirituality clearly resonates with the steep template provided by @f3nix. The fact that you recall a memory of Ethan from the thread of the story and then elegantly describe the arc back is a nice change.

You make it clear that the reflections on what is meant by faith and religion are very personal. In principle, I believe that any conflict is superfluous at the moment of death.

There are two poles of human mindset that have duality and extremes: one describes the universe as stupid, completely mechanical and chaotic, without any intention. The other describes it as fate oriented, as a determined intelligence that outlines how human life is shaped. Both seem inappropriate to really describe our universe and all life in it. I rather assume that neither the mechanistic nor the predestined version are true. Since I don't know, but don't want to think in terms of either-or terminologies, I think death is a good secret that we'd rather never get off the ground. Because otherwise all fun would be spoiled.

Wow. Thanks for the comment.

Only in our final moments, do we really know ourselves. A very powerful ending. The contrast you paint between their characters on thanksgiving, their way of life and how their beliefs effect that, works so well with the coming together of realisation and wondering. There is a beautiful touch of indignance in that last bit that fits so well with the character you've established, it balances the abstract aspects of Yoh from the first half, with the human details of Ethan.

Thanks! Haiku in prose.

Haiku in prose is a beautiful idea.

I liked reading about what happened this week of Thanksgiving from another's perspective.

Your direction of the prompt was a fun read.

Thanks. Great game with the Monster's of the Midway leading the charge with Mitch on the bench.

I'm not going into the content of that last memory but stopping on the treshold of it. I loved the fact that his last feeling maybe wasn't the one he would have thought it could be.. it's a such an authentic reaction that I'm amazed of how you could have found this solution. Your capability to divert from the absolute/epic sci-fi setting and immerse us in a family intimate memory is remarkable!

Thank you for the feedback.

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Hey buddy! Can you correct the author of Lucid Dream pls.. it's me, not @theironfelix 😉 .. (theironf3nix?)

I've often wondered, LOL. Yes I'll do that right away!

Thanks!


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