Final Moment

in #fiftywords6 years ago (edited)

He remembered being a kid.
He remembered graduating.

He remembered his first salary.
He remembered his first house.

He remembered falling in love.
He remembered the beautiful holidays.

He remembered his children smile.

He rem.....
He stopped ...
Stopped remembering.

Beep Beep Beep Beep

flat line.........

Doctor: Time of death, 9:05pm.
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This is for #fiftywords challenge by @jayna

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Thank you😊

I left Aisha in the other room to check on you

Wow. Nice first story, @wems. It's a moment we can't experience until it is too late to describe it to anyone, so we can only wonder. I had a feeling of peace, when reading this, and imagined the person passing on is enjoying some memories before kissing life goodbye.

Peace! Exactly what I was aiming for. I wanted people to know that even when our loved ones passed on and it all about tears and sadness...There's that moment that we can't take away from them and it comes with peace. Thanks for the comment @jayna

Someone has found her muse again...

I always knew you were good!

😊😊

Profound... Very well written.. I imagine a train of thought like this is quite common as people slip away..

Thank you. It quite common.

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