Changes (a fifty-word story for @jayna)

in #fiftywords6 years ago
Greetings, 50-worders and readers. This is my entry to @jayna's #fiftywords challenge. This week’s prompt is
snowflake
. You can see the details of the challenge here:
https://steemit.com/challenge/@jayna/fiftywordchallengefortheweekminiwritingworkshop-5r79jkylq9

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“I believe you, Grandma’.”
But, the rocks were here, huge. We’d contemplate the whole village.
It was a long journey.
These hot plains.
Maybe I’m too tired.
But later, by the river, they were stunned as cold snowflakes melted on their cheeks where the bottomless lagoon had become a sandy ford.

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Those of us who have grown in tropical zones feel a special fascination for snow. It’s the fascination for that which is unusual, almost fantastic. The excitement produced by the contemplation of the first snow ever (even if mere quick-melting flakes) is difficult to put in words. I thought of writing about it. But, then came to my mind the reports of climatic changes so drastic that have allowed people to see snow in deserted places or flowers and grass in former ever-white mountains. I decided to combine that idea with an anecdote my mother recently told me about the last time she visited the hills of Los Marines, her ancestors’ home. She told me of changes so extreme in the landscape that she felt she was in the wrong place (and we are talking about urban developments or any other man-made modifications). It occurred to me that if rocky hills and bottomless pools can disappear, why not imagine that it can snow in the hot hills of Cajigal county?

Saludos a los participantes del reto de 50 palabras y a los lectores en general. Esta es mi participación en el reto de @jayna #fiftywords. La palabra de esta semana es
copo de nieve
. Pueden ver los detalles del reto aquí:
https://steemit.com/challenge/@jayna/fiftywordchallengefortheweekminiwritingworkshop-5r79jkylq9

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“Está bien, abuela, yo te creo.”
Pero, estaban aquí, enormes. Nos trepábamos en esas piedras y se veía todo el caserío.
Había sido un viaje largo y cansón de vuelta a los calientes llanos de sus ancestros. Quizás la anciana estaba demasiado cansada para recordar los lugares correctamente, pensó la niña.
Pero cuando llegaron a al rio al día siguiente y la anciana cayó de rodillas, llorando incrédula, la niña entró en pánico. La famosa laguna sin fondo se había convertido en un recodo arenoso.
Y justo cuando estaba a punto de preguntar “¿Y ahora qué?”, sintieron fríos copos de nieve aterrizando suavemente en sus rostros.

Los que hemos crecido en zonas cálidas sentimos una especial fascinación por la nieve. Es la fascinación por aquello que es inusual, casi que fantástico. La emoción que embarga contemplar la primera nevada (así sea leve) es difícil de expresar con palabras. Pensé en escribir al respecto. Pero luego se me vinieron a la mente reportes de cambios climáticos tan bruscos que han permitido a la gente ver nieve en lugares desérticos o flores y grama verde en montañas otrora nevadas. Decidí combinar esa idea con una anécdota reciente que me contó mi mamá de su última visita a los cerros de Los Marines, el lugar de sus ancestros. Me contó de cambios tan bruscos e increíbles en el ambiente que le pareció que estaba en el lugar equivocado. Se me ocurre que si promontorios rocosos y pozas super profundas pueden desaparecer, ¿por qué no imaginar que puede nevar en los cerros cálidos de Cajigal?

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Awesome! I never gave it thought how people living in the tropics look at snow. Where I'm from snow is normal, and no longer holds that magical effect like when I was a kid. I wish I could see it that way again.
Nice Job!

Thanks. I guess that which is common to us we take for granted. Like mangoes and apples. You give a venezuelan an apple these days and it would be like a northerner getting a toucan, or something that exotic.
We used to have apples in our stores; because they were imported they were more expensive, but affordable. Now, they just disappear and there is a generation of kids who have not seen an apple in 6 years, only in pictures and on tv :)

Magic Realism in 50 words! Well penned, dear @hlezama :) And we certainly find snow magical, although we do have it in the north-west area of the country. I still do.

Really interesting story, @hlezama. Yes, climate change is causing bizarre things to happen. It's not just a matter of everything getting warmer. It's warmer oceans and weirder weather. It's mixed up seasons and odd weather patterns. (By the way, I wrote this comment sometime yesterday, but somehow didn't click "Post!")

Haha. I believe you. It has happened to me. More embarassing yet, I have upvoted posts, or so i had thought, but the vote never got registered.

yes, weather changes is a fact that ironically lots of people decide to ignore or even negate. Better negation than assumption of responsibility.

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@hlezama,

As usual, a thoughtful insight and an excellent post. Good entry.

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