RE: Ghost At The Feast (Fifty Word Short Story)
{So glad it's not just me that does that, I probably forget to leave about half the things I write in the end, one day I'll end up going back and leaving loads of them}
<3 I really appreciate this!!
See this first part is really interesting, cos I was worried I needed to be more blatant. Although yeah, the more I think about this, you are totally on point. Instead of just stating that the voices were right, it's more effective to convey the effects of accepting that fact. I had first thought something more subtle would fit the character better, 'He turned away, hiding the tears." but there is a lot of power in having more emotion in the last line and in leaving it more open entirely as to what is really going on. The last sentence does have a sense of detachment, like fact stating, which draws a line as the end, but it could instead wrap it up with a bit more mystery. I would say it's probably too late to edit it now though.
I do very much like the concept of a story allowing room for projection, leaving spaces where people can apply the most relevant possibility for them, sometimes it doesn't come off as easily, so notes are always appreciated, as are your wonderful comments <3