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RE: The mistake of Jack - Chapter 1 - FICTION
The story really pulls you in, you most certainly do have a talent for writing! :D
I can't wait to see what else happens! This is an awesome cliffhanger!
One thing though, if I may...
In the last paragraph, after "He tried to reach for his phone ... ... " I got kind of lost in the time frame of what you're describing.
Other than that, I love it! Upvoted, followed and resteemed!
Make sure this isn't your last story! :D
Edit: I checked your post history. I'm hooked! This will keep me busy for hours :3
Ooooh thanks and yes I see what you mean there. It's great that you pointed that out to me. Thanks. ;)
criticism is always good as long as its constructive ^^ I'm glad you see it that way aswell! :D