I like the way you didn't go all out with the hydrogen's quest. I think it's a good approach to give readers some taste regarding hydrogen's and proton's point of view at the same time. I would like to keep reading the next parts with this dynamic. Besides, maybe you could introduce some impactful event during the H2O amusement park, who knows?

Keep up the great work; I'm looking forward to read the next parts!

Shaden