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RE: The Gods of Love and War - Part 1 (Short Fiction)
I usually visualise in colour so seeing things in monochrome is unusual. I think the way the narrator character was describing things in this kind of calm but intense way got me into that feel, like those hard boiled detectives that knew that dame was trouble as soon as she walked into the office 😆
I can see how the POV can create that imagery in your mind. And those old B&W detective noirs have a striking effect, so I'm with you there.
And they always seem to know they're trouble, but proceed anyway. I guess the difference here is that the narrator is a detective, but only really in search of himself.
They wouldn't be able to have a story if the detective didn't proceed despite knowing that there was trouble XD And it's kind of expected in their line of work right ;)
I did pick up on that search for himself after the Sofia part (but not in so many words, I don't always thoroughly explain what I think XD), the Emily part did a pretty good job of setting that up :)
Ah yes, the dame that was sweetness and light. It would make for a short, and unfulfilling read. So I see your point :)
Each relationship is linked, but Emily's needed to be first. I found it set up the premise better. Glad that it came across that way.