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RE: The Gods of Love and War - Part 1 (Short Fiction)
I can see how the POV can create that imagery in your mind. And those old B&W detective noirs have a striking effect, so I'm with you there.
And they always seem to know they're trouble, but proceed anyway. I guess the difference here is that the narrator is a detective, but only really in search of himself.
They wouldn't be able to have a story if the detective didn't proceed despite knowing that there was trouble XD And it's kind of expected in their line of work right ;)
I did pick up on that search for himself after the Sofia part (but not in so many words, I don't always thoroughly explain what I think XD), the Emily part did a pretty good job of setting that up :)
Ah yes, the dame that was sweetness and light. It would make for a short, and unfulfilling read. So I see your point :)
Each relationship is linked, but Emily's needed to be first. I found it set up the premise better. Glad that it came across that way.