An Awful Scent (a five-minute #freewrite)

in fiction •  5 months ago 


Thick, full-blooded cologne swept through the crowded bodies and graced Jenny's nose. Perhaps 'graced' was too kind a word; it ravaged her nostrils, sent her olfactories aflame, and she gagged as the odour flew down her throat and pulled at her stomach, as it took hold of her intestines and twisted them together.

It was strong. Too strong. Military strong. Was this their new tactic? Overwhelm the enemy with intensified odours?

The bodies at her back pushed up against barred windows and doors, their groans and wheezes as thick and heavy as the god-damned scent. One of them, however, was unperturbed. The balding man with one impossibly long strand of hair in the middle of his forehead sent her a wink as he watched her suffer.

He was the culprit.

"It ain't me, lass," he called out to her through the groaning masses, an obnoxious sneer painted across his chubby cheeks. "I can't smell a damned thing."

"You don't need to smell a damned thing to be the damned cause!" she shouted back.

A hundred burning eyes whipped around and glared at the man. A hundred feet simultaneously stepped towards him. Beads of sweat glimmered atop his hairless scalp.

The pack descended.

 


 

Hullo! It's Day 556 of @mariannewest's five-minute #freewrite! :D The prompt for today is -- cologne -- and this is what I came up with before the eggtimer website went beep-a-beep at me.

You can find today's challenge at the following link:
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-556-5-minute-freewrite-monday-prompt-cologne

And today's header image is CC0 and courtesy of Pixabay!

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I feel like a little old lady learning how to use technology for the first time.

Anyway ~ thanks for stopping by, having a read, and hopefully enjoying my teeny five-minutes of writing! :)

 


 





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Your descriptions are excellent to the point I almost smelled this man. Great characterization, too!

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Thank you! :D

I'm almost tempted to do another one... I wrote this and then took my son to school, then stopped by the shops to grab a few things, and on the walk back home another 'cologne' related plot whipped into mind and brought tears to my eyes... mulling it over now because there might be something in it for a full story one day. :) Hooray for #freewrite prompts!!