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RE: SHORT FICTION - When the Levee Breaks
I had thought I've seen the title before! While I'm a fan of the original, I think your tweaks really worked for this. They really elevated the piece to a level I never thought was possible (or even needed). Great work posting this as sort of a throwback. Everything felt fresh!
That's the first time I have published two versions of the same story. I think the first one was good, but after receiving feedback from one of the writing groups at the time I came to notice its flaws. And once i saw them I couldn't pretend they weren't there. But that didn't change the fact I still liked the story concept. I always wanted to return to it at some point, and give it its dues.
I think it's a more complete story now. The main issue was to get it into one characters perspective (there were mixed POV issues previously), and keep that consistent. Added descriptive elements, and a few other pieces. Not a lot really. But the reworking did give it a new feel. It was a good experience in editing - learning to let go of the deadwood in the story, adding new material that fits with the already written parts, and making it all gel now.