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RE: Reborn: Chapter Fifty Nine "The Anti-Hero"

in #fiction8 years ago

When I said previously that Anna shouldn't be forgiven so easily for her actions, I really didn't mean for her to get raped. I know it's a touchy subject, but in my opinion, you scripted this very well. Sharp writing for this chapter. The action flowed seamlessly, and the pacing was spot on. The rollercoaster of emotions that Anna went through was depicted really well. Way to put on a clinic, my friend!

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Yes, it was brutally done, but is it rape when she'd made the pact with him, and given him permission? With two such headstrong characters as Jared and Anna, it was never gonna go down easy!

It's my fault for putting that thought in there "the unrapeable being raped" even though you are absolutely right, he had permission. Also, he doesn't have a clue as to who and what she is. Hopefully the readers remember that every last female had been either turned or hunted down and killed, she drinks from humans which he can smell so even if/when he considers that she's not fully turned he's certainly not going to realize many things about her. Michael is one of the youngest vampires alive at 130 years old, and there haven't been new females in much longer than that...and let's not forget he hates humans to add more fun to the story! lol :)

I remember those things ;-)

I thought you would ;) People are going to hate me for certain ways I do things, particularly lots of tension and anticipation and build up, but in the end they'll love me for it...I can say that with some amount of confidence considering those who have read books one and two so far :)

The execution of this chapter was great, my friend! Those are good points you guys brought up, and I'm glad that there's a comments section to discuss these things! Definitely conversation material :D

Thank you and agreed. If my comments are a little shorter than usual, I apologize, I'm feeling a bit under the weather and weak. Need to get my strength back up, been putting in some extra hours of sleep :) Going to check your page, and a few others.

No worries about that, my friend! What's important is you get your strength back up to 100% :D I'm not feeling that great as well, but I can manage. Sleep all day, sister! You deserve it for all the hard work you put in to everything you do :D

Nothing good ever comes easy, or so they say. Certainly in this context, the tension is a necessary part of the good story.

OOOHHHH good catch, Deb! I guess technically it isn't. It's a tricky line to balance, but it was wonderfully depicted. (Now I can say "wonderful" given the context without offending anyone haha!)

You certainly won't be offending me ;-)

For the 'rape' stuff, see deb and my comments lol.
Thank you for the compliments, again this is a chapter I wanted to come across a certain way and it appears to have done its job! :)

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