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RE: Crossing Paths - A Short Story
Yeah, HUD means Heads Up Display. The shots were him killing his childhood friend because he was labeled an enemy of the state...
I write rather depressing stuff most the time. Railroad crossing probably would have turned into some sorta wreck. I'm not really depressed most the time, I just like sad stuff. Weird thing about humans that we like sad stuff....
That’s what I thought, that he killed his friend, but then it wasn’t quite clear to me that actually happened! It felt a little rushed there. So I think if you fixed that, it’d be even better. :)
Sad is fine. Look forward to the next one.
Yeah, I was trying not to elaborate to help convey the sense that it wasn't a huge deal to the guy, but it was missing something there. Just added another detail to at least make it clear his friend died.