RE: Crossing Paths - A Short Story

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Crossing Paths - A Short Story

in fiction •  5 months ago

I had railway crossings in my head when I gave you that prompt. I like what you did with it though! The crossing of friends who have really got separate paths! You also followed through. As your virtual mom, I am proud of you son! Lol

I got a little confused with HUD, I assume you mean Heads Up Display. I didn’t get the firing of the shots either...

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Yeah, HUD means Heads Up Display. The shots were him killing his childhood friend because he was labeled an enemy of the state...

I write rather depressing stuff most the time. Railroad crossing probably would have turned into some sorta wreck. I'm not really depressed most the time, I just like sad stuff. Weird thing about humans that we like sad stuff....

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That’s what I thought, that he killed his friend, but then it wasn’t quite clear to me that actually happened! It felt a little rushed there. So I think if you fixed that, it’d be even better. :)

Sad is fine. Look forward to the next one.

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Yeah, I was trying not to elaborate to help convey the sense that it wasn't a huge deal to the guy, but it was missing something there. Just added another detail to at least make it clear his friend died.