Well, my advice is that you get the help of a translator. I don't know what you are trying to say in some parts, so you need someone who speaks your language and can translate properly. I can't be your translator, but I will give you one example from the first paragraph.

"She is very dreamed up by the martyrs. "

I have no idea what that means. Do the martyrs make her have dreams? Do the martyrs have dreams about her? Are the martyrs lifting her up in the air by having dreams? That's just one sentence. That one paragraph has several such problems. You need an English speaking translator.

But that doesn't make the story bad, I read it and enjoyed it. It just means it doesn't pass our guidelines. You should keep working on them and try to improve the translation.