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RE: Codename: machine dream (original spoken word)
Entangling fumes from the cemetery city of sewers,
The chill of the poison cellars of the drug brewers.
Sell the poison on the street like the proper stewards
Of the nightmare fallacy hell-symphony,
The endless grind that's effacing our sanity
Not outright but most intricately.
This verse is amazingly written I can't believe it's a song, so much poetic effect to the way it rhymes, the way the words Pierce deep into the soul.
It's beautiful how you use words like a fountain deep down with plenty to still serve.
Honestly you've brought months of beautiful sounds, songs and poems my friend thank you too, you've been amazing too, with all the support
@josediccus it's interesting, for years I couldn't find out how you could blend songwriting and poetry, and for me the answer is through rap. I find I am able to address more expansive topics because of the increased speed and flexibility of nontonality (or partial tone.) The part you singled out is pretty harrowing, but so is our society, at times. I so appreciate all your feedback and really enjoyed your @dsound poetry from earlier! Have a great one.
When art runs in the vein, blending the genres will be inevitable, for a long time, I never see the music aspect of you,
But immediately you picked up the pieces I knew that it was about time you started blending it.
My music part is yet to be perfected though .
Thank you too for that amazing feedback on that dsound poem, I'm so delighted