The first chapter of my story The order of the dragon

in #story7 years ago

IMG_0204.PNG Ben woke up to the crowing of the rooster as he had every day since he could remember. As was his usual routine he got out of his bed and haphazardly straitened the blanket his mother had made him before he left East Odsen to start his farm on the outskirts of town. He went over to the hearth and lit a splinter of wood from the pile and lit the candle on his night table so he could see a little better in his small farm house that his father and brothers helped him build all those years ago. Then he went over to the flowery wash basin that had been a wedding gift from his wife's rich aunt and rinsed his face and swished some water around in his mouth to get the taste of sleep out. Then he went over to the wardrobe and took off his night clothes and put on his new shirt he had traded Miss Milly some eggs and cream for. It really was a nice shirt and quite comfortable considering how cheap it was. He knew Miss Milly only made the shirt for him because she had felt bad for him after his wife died. Then he put on his old overalls with more patches then original material and even though they were getting a bit snug he loved them especially since they were the last thing his wife Sandra had made for him before she had been so brutally attacked by that strange flying creature. Then he put on his boots with the worn out soles and thought about the fact that he needed to go to town and see Sam the cobbler and have them resoled which made him think about all the other things he had to do in town.
Ben was thinking about the old man that Jake the youngest son of the innkeeper had come all the way out to his little farm to tell him about and that the old man asked about him by name. Ben knew everyone in town and all the surrounding towns for that matter and he had never herd of this Zimmian Blooddraw but he figured the news of what had happened to Sandra may have made it past the Onie river or maybe even to the capital in Estramila and maybe this old man was from the League of Dragons. He had always wanted to meet a real wizard but no one in East Odsen had ever met one except Tubby who had fought in the grate dragon wars and Tubby was known to tell tall tales especially after a day in the tavern.
Ben went out to the barn and gathered all his wares and loaded them onto the wagon and hitched old Clay his horse up and started to get ready to leave for town when he heard something like thunder but even though it was still early in the morning he could see it was going to be a hot and dry day. "So what was that sound and the vibration that he could feel in his chest "Ben thought. Then he saw the old man in the flowing red robes striding toward his house. The way the old man walked with that staff with the shiny top that Ben couldn't quite figure out what it was told Ben that this must be the man Jake had told him about. Again Ben herd the thunder but this time he realized it was a voice and could clearly hear his name "Benjamin Stillwater " but how could he feel that vibration in his chest as though it were thunder if it was just this old man's voice? While half scared and half exhilarated at knowing he was about to meet a real wizard he started running towards his house to go meet the man.
Ben got all the way to the front side of his house before realizing how tall this old man was and he really took the man's appearance in. He has tall and rather skinny for his height but had an air of nobility and power Ben had never seen before his robes were blood red with a golden rope tied at his waist and his staff that shiny thing Ben had seen when he was back at the barn was some kind of gem stone clear and smooth in the perfect shape is a dragon. Ben though that the dragon gem stone thing was alive because it looked as though it were breathing. The man didn't look that old but Ben couldn't quite make out how old he thought he was he had an ageless look to him and his eyes while light blue and normal looking they had a sharpness to them as though he had seen more than a thousand men would see in a thousand lifetimes.
The old man began to speak as he saw Ben round the corner of the house " I am Zimmian Blooddraw from the order of the dragon"the old man said in a firm clear voice but this time with no thunder in it. "You must be Benjamin Stillwater"
Ben couldn't believe it he was actually face to face with a real wizard. Ben choked out the words "Yes I am." Before losing his nerve to say more. The man looked at Ben at though studying something.
The old man then said " My friends call me Zim. Since I believe we are going to become friends I think you can call me Zim as well." And just like that the old man's gaze relaxed.
Just then Ben realized his mouth was agape and quickly closed it so as not to look like a child seeing the sky lights of the festival of the moons for the first time. Then gathering his nerve Ben said " I'm Benjamin Stillwater but you can call me Ben." Ben somehow felt relaxed after getting that out and actually felt himself smile not the fake smile he showed everyone in town when he was selling his fresh fruit and vegetables or eggs and cream but a real smile like the ones he gave Sandra or his good friend Abe.

I decided to try and write a story this is the first chapter I would appreciate any constructive criticism anyone here on steemit may have thank you for taking the time to read i will post the next chapter tomorrow and about a chapter a day after that

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Interesting story, I'll check back again tomorrow for the next part. I'm invested in this character and interested to see what life holds for him. I really enjoyed this, although the over use of then at the beginning was a small struggle to weigh through. I don't say this to be mean or rude, only because you asked for feedback. Over all this was a nice sample to get the taste for more in my mouth. Thank you! I am new on here, and would love some feedback as well if you have time, cheers!

Thank you for the help and believe me I take no offense I enjoy writing but I enjoy knowing people are enjoying reading what I write even more and I followed you and read one of your stories as well I would be interested in seeing you continue that story as well

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