Interesting story, I'll check back again tomorrow for the next part. I'm invested in this character and interested to see what life holds for him. I really enjoyed this, although the over use of then at the beginning was a small struggle to weigh through. I don't say this to be mean or rude, only because you asked for feedback. Over all this was a nice sample to get the taste for more in my mouth. Thank you! I am new on here, and would love some feedback as well if you have time, cheers!