Raiders of the Middle Sea Part 1- A World of Kedra Story

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Raiders of the Middle Sea

a World of Kedra Story

Foreword

Raiders of the Middle Sea happens to the west side of the World of Kedra map. Far away from the Kingdom of Railor in unexplored lands that are strange and unfamiliar to the heroes of the story.

The story starts with Kayden, a sailor that worked on a cargo-ship that came under attack from pirates. Because of the young man's obvious skill with a sword he was targeted by the crew. Not to kill, but to capture.

The Slaver Lords of Ortiga pay a handsome fee for slaves, especially those that can be entered into the bloodsports. It is a mark of stature for a Slaver Lord to own a champion.

The full story of how Kayden ends up where he is will be revealed in more detail and the story of the surviving crew of the King's Dart also becomes part of the story at a later stage.

It is a story of adventure and bloodshed... without further ado...

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Part 1

“Release the competitors!” The hoarse voice of the presenter cried from above the wall of the arena.

The crude iron gate of Kayden’s cage was drawn upwards and he readied his sword and shield. The shield was Railor make and he was familiar with it, a rectangle with well-rounded corners. The sword however was curved so badly that it made a sickle shape. Despite his training, he would not be able to employ any swordsmanship that he knew of with the weapon.
It was the third day since his capture aboard the King’s Dart and now he found himself here. He should have died on the deck with honour. Now instead he would die a slave.

The enclosure that he had been put into was one of many that lined the sides of the arena. He had been led through the sandy space late at night and could not have much beyond the light of the torches. On the inside of the cage, he was limited by iron bars, beyond which the guards had watched him and passed him the foul smelling gruel that was supposed to pass for food. Kayden had not touched the bowl however.

Men on the inside of the building now poked him forward with blunt sticks and he stepped into the arena. He was struck by a wall of sound and light and he raised his blade to shield his eyes while they adjusted to the glare. He did not dare raise his shield from his body. All around him in the stands people cheered at his arrival, although he could start to see that there were others in the arena as well.

The people who looking down at him were commoners as well as the elite, scattered amongst them. They were brought together in this place in the anticipation to see blood. He had no more time to think as the men closest to him were within five paces or so to either side of him.

The closest man to his right was stripped to his waist just like Kayden, his skin was several shades darker than he’d seen before in the Kingdom. He must be from the south or one of the islands. The man held a spear above his right shoulder, ready to stab or throw. He carried a much smaller shield with an elongated cap in the centre of it that could be used to great effect as a weapon.

On the other side was some kind of savage whose ears had been cut off. His face mottled in dark spotted tattoos, perhaps in the pattern of some kind of feline. The man was armed with two straight short swords.

“Today’s event is simple!” The presenter cried from his raised pulpit. A large bellied man with olive coloured skin and thick black mustachios. He wore a feathered hat and a garish plethora of coloured clothes that shone in the midday sun. “There are twelve fighters enter the arena, but only five may exit and live to see another day!”

The crowd roared its approval.

“Psst!” Kayden glanced aside at the tan brown man. The man pointed at him and gestured towards the earless man on the other side of him and then to himself and towards the other side. The intention was clear, temporary truce.

“Take your bets!” The presenter cried.

He looked at the spotted savage as it stared at him and baring its teeth. Kayden shivered as he saw that there were far more teeth in that mouth than there had a right to be, like the spawn of some kind of demon monster.

Before he could think of doing anything else there was the peal of the massive bronze metal disc behind the presenter and the arena burst into motion. The clash of metal on metal, unfamiliar inhuman screams were heard while the earless savage took three quick steps and was right before Kayden.

The man stank, together with the strange features and teeth, Kayden decided that this could definitely not be a human being after all. The fact should have chilled him to his core and shaken his faith but the creature had no fear, neither did it have much anger. It simply came for Kayden with a methodical aggression meant to kill.

The earless creature slashed out with the left sword and Kayden clashed his shield into it. The second sword shot out quicker but Kayden had expected the blow. The bent sword had a long reach and Kayden’s clumsy parry with it yielded an unexpected slip along the other’s straight blade, the tip of the sickle cutting across two fingers. The cuts had gone deep but the creature never let go of the weapon.

Instead of screaming, the creature snarled and launched into another attack. This time, Kayden stepped in quicker smashing the shield into the monster’s face. Dark blood gushed from its broad nose as it fell back into the sand. He slashed down with the sickle piercing the creature’s chest.

Glancing around quickly he saw the brown skinned man drive his spear into the belly of a bearded man that was covered in rags. Beyond him there were two more earless creatures who were snarling and snapping at each other while grappling in the dust.

A quick tug on the weapon showed Kayden that his weapon was stuck. Reaching for one of the dropped straight swords, he felt the coolness of a large shadow come over his body.

Kayden dove out over the sand and dropped his shield as the massive head of a mallet struck the ground where he had just been, snapping the sword that he had reached for. He regained his feet and stared up at the monstrous figure before him. Bearded and large bellied, but indeed just a man. The man’s brow was low and brutal. As he grinned, showing his few remaining blunted teeth. The gesture didn’t manage to make him much less ugly. A scar crossed over the bridge of his nose that had made a real good mess of it.

To Be Continued

Raiders of the Middle Sea Part 2

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Hi Zak, thank you for letting us read your work. I find this to be a pretty good start to what I imagine is going to be a long story. If I were to make any suggestion, I would say that you need to add more "meat" to the story. It feels as though I'm reading instead of experiencing it.

As a start, though, I like the concept and it has a nice flow.

Hi there, thanks! Yes it is definitely just a start of things.

Raiders of the Middle Sea was originally written as a pulp fiction piece based in my World of Kedra brand. It will flesh out a bit as it goes along. I wrote this a while ago, but I will see if I can beef it up a little.

I am careful not to have my episodes be too long. Do you think that it was a good length?

Also, there will be other stories that I have written that cover the World of Kedra from other angles. Nations Under Siege, Daggers in the Mist and Dreadknight are among the content that will be coming out. I will just need to gear myself up for all that.

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Very exciting. Nice combat action sequences, very well thought-out.

Great start. I can see this easily being the setup to a larger story, and this is a fine start to set things up.

If I'd offer anything, I'd really like to see each segment end at a key point in the story. Make me want to read more :)

I do also want to know more about Kayden right out of the gate. Why should I care about him? You hint about his backstory in the second paragraph, but I want to know what sort of guy this fellow is.

Keep going!

Thanks for the feedback. As you know I will definitely take it into account.

I wrote this some time ago and the history and character of Kayden, his new friends and his old ship crew will be revealed in time.

I will have to take what was intended to be a longer fiction and beef up the mini episodes. A challenge.

Woah, what an entrance! I'm already glued in and can't wait to see more!

As others have said, a bit more polishing and beefing up would definitely make this shine even more. But what you have so far is a fantastic start!

I am glad you liked it! :D

I have the next one ready and waiting. Will try to polish and beef it a bit because of aforementioned factors though.

In your opinion, how many hours from the last one would you like to see the sequel? My intention was a post a day. But to create a weekly cycle of what I will post.

Like the others here, I too like the concept that has been presented here. It read well enough. Perhaps having had a chance to see more of who Kayden is before he is fighting for his life may add to it. And ending each episode on more of a cliffhanger (nothing overly dramatic, but so I really want to know how he fares). These are just suggestions, but like I said, I enjoyed the read, and what I can see is going to be an interesting world unfold before me.

Haha! Stay tuned.

The result of the arrival of the giant bearded man might not be what could be guessed. Where Kayden ends up might be even less predictable.

I look forward to the reading the developments as they unfold. Keep the readers guessing - I like it.

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I have included your story in a new curation post called The Library.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories.

Oh cool! That's great!

Exciting stuff. I'm a bit late to the party so can't upvote, but I will read the next part as soon a I get some time.

Couldn't help but think of Spartacus when reading this (that's not a bad thing. One of my favourite shows). With a little added fantasy of course.

Thanks man. Fantasy Spartacus, can't go wrong there.

Yeah there will always be something less than 7 days old if you wish to read and upvote :)

One of my friends here do a thing where he grabs them 3 at a time because they are short and sequential. Otherwise I do a post a day.... Though currently Sundays is about Life and Wednesdays is about Worldbuilding and exploring my world.

Upvoted some recent posts. Not that I have any power, but hey, it's one more vote. :-)

That's a good idea to do themed days. I'm thinking about doing that myself soon, as I'm a bit inconsistent right now. I think it's likely to bring some additional readers if people know what to expect when.

A doot is a doot my friend. Every bit helps. Thank you very much!

Yeah even though I have a lot of content I have the stance that if it is not published yet then it may change and I have had to change or add parts to my story to make them fit in the smaller format of a daily Steemit fiction read.

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