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RE: FROM THE DUST - PROLOGUE - PART ONE ~ THIS IS MY FIRST BOOK SO PLEASE OFFER UP YOUR SUPPORT!
Trust me my friend, other ventures in life have given me thick skin, namely being a musician and face of numerous businesses. There is no such thing as bad publicity except your own obituary ;)
Thank you for the help none the less, it is nice to get some aid from my fellow writers. Speaking of exposure, care to give a resteem? LOL. I'd also like to get some feedback on the writing and the story itself if you have read it?
Thanks again my friend!
Let it be written, let it be done, Sahib...
RE: Your Story
It reminds me of the setting of David Cage's "Detroit: Become Human".
And IMHO, for readability's sake, paragraphs should have different shapes and sizes. For example, some great writers can make one word become a paragraph.
Shit!
Is that hubris? Lol!
Namaste, Jaichai
I can see splitting some of the paragraphs up. Good idea and solid comment. I appreciate the feedback!
May you and yours be well and life life today, my friend.
Namaste, Jaichai
Thank you my friend! Your comment and feedback actually was very useful, as I stepped back to observe some other fine writer's work and took in examples of such. I will be editing my work to do just that. I cannot thank you enough for honest and constructive feedback!