Wing Arena - Part 1
Once upon a swampy evening, Vanya crossed the bridge believing she was free to move about unbothered by the gator feedings. Self-absorbed, she saunters steely. Suddenly the world surreally spins between the axis of a murky surface and wet blackness.
Nearly panicked, barely breathing, captured leg profusely bleeding, curls her body 'round the gator just to keep that leg from breaking. Swiftly, she's still suffocating, yet her mind is calculating whilst her arm is reaching, grabbing, desperate for her diamond dagger.
First, she flails, her world still spinning. Then, she gets it, grips it, pulls it, swings her arm, and then starts stabbing -- but that only makes it madder. Suddenly, the spinning staggers. To the depths, the gator drags her. Punching, scratching, stabbing faster... yet, it seems, her stabs don't matter.
Praying that her leg won't shatter, braves a gamble and bends backwards. With both hands, she drives the dagger deep within its liable chin.
Leg free, she grins. Revenge begins.
Beast in tow, she swims to surface. Drinks air once there with her bonus. Scares off scavengers with hisses. Drags the beast upon the bridge and vents its chest and reaches in and claims the heart and sips its sauce and licks it like a lolli-meat-pop.
Hears a stumble in the bushes, shifts her eyes to see the movement: T'was some young one, barely blooming, cam in hand for filmed amusement. Shocked, now frozen. Standing, staring... Fearful of the sight he's seeing.
Tickled by his frightful sight, she bears her teeth and takes a bite, then -- smiling sweetly, blood still dripping -- holds out the heart in offering.
No longer stunned -- he flees, distressed.
Shrugging, Vanya ingests the rest.
So, my goal is to complete this entire story in trochaic octameter (inspired by Edgar Allan Poe's The Raven). However, considering how long it took to complete just this part (almost a week), it may prove to be more of an undertaking than I expected. Might take some time to complete...
As always, feedback is welcome.
Thank you for reading! ^_^
~Pegasus
Amazing.
Thank you! ^_^
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Muxxybot would be pleased you are pleased....*........*....if he had feelings"trochaic octameter" - had to look that up! Makes for an interesting rhythm. Seems like quit the challenge, but you got there. A dark and moody ready, but with purpose and flow.
Hi @naquoya Thank you for the feedback! I'm so happy I got there. ^_^
Maintaining that purpose and flow in this format is what made it so challenging... half of the lines were rewritten at least a dozen times.
I can completely see how something of this nature would take a week to write. Marrying a specific rhythm with a story that actually makes sense is difficult. I applaud you :)
Thank you so much. ^_^
@pegasusphysics
Great writeup!
Keep sharing.
@qagiri Thank you! Will do. ^_^
What are you even doing? How can you do this? I'm in awe. Such great stuff. Not that you need it, but you made Best of Steemit. Again.
Thank you so much, @cristof, it means a lot! This is the kind of motivation that speeds up productivity! ^_^
It's cool!
"Once upon a swampy evening" - somehow, it just doesn't have the same effect as "Once upon a midnight dreary" - and I supsect it's the word order. Adjective following noun. "Once upon an evening swampy" - ?
Yea, I wanted to nod to The Raven with the first line, but I also wanted to make it my own, so I tied it in to rhyming with "believing". ^_^
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