Improve your Writing (Shifts in Time)

in #writing7 years ago

Often we switch between our tenses, past, present and future, and we don't notice when we do this. When we change the tenses of your verbs we create these shifts in time. It is best to avoid this.


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Example:

Incorrect: I walked into the room, I am not alone.
Correct: I walked into the room, I was not alone.

The way that the sentence changes leaving the reader unsure of when the sentence takes place.

Make sure that you have chosen a tense, past or present. Once you have done this make sure you stick to it unless you are starting something new in a new paragraph.


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Some shifts in time are obvious and necessary in your writing.
Example:

Playing computer can become addictive.Studies show, that there was many people who have played computer games last year.

In the second sentence it shows us why we need the past tense, it is based on past studies.

When writing, about ideas or events that have happened, in an essay make sure to use present tense.

Example from:Link
Hiking in bear country can be scary. When I was about 12-year-old, my father and I had an encounter with a bear in the woods. One day while hiking through a dense forest we heard some rustling in the thick bushes ahead of us. As we stopped and listened, the sound gets closer and closer.

When the sound stops, a huge brown bear rises out of the bushes, standing on its hind legs. My dad brought a gun in case of a bear encounter, so he pulled out and aimed it at the bear. The bear sees us and decides he wasn’t interested. Luckily, he didn’t attack and we didn’t have to shoot him.

“Hiking in bear country can be scary” (This sentence is correct. Even though the story is told in past tense, this general statement is a present, on-going fact.)

“As we stopped and listened, the sound gets closer and closer. When the sound stops, a huge brown bear rises out of the bushes, standing on its hind legs.” (Unnecessary to switch from past to present tense.: … standing on its hind hind legs” is okay and would work with either past or present)

“The bear sees us and decides he wasn’t interested.” (Unnecessarily starts in present tense.)

This example was just really amazing so I had to share it with you guys. Remember to make sure your shifts in time are not there or they are done right. Bad shifts leave your reader confused and they will have to go back to try figure out what you are writing.


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Just on a little side note for self improvement. I will be doing pushups, situps and squats for the amount of $$$ I earn on this post and will give a short feedback every day at the end of each post. This will be split in equally between all 3. Any not done will carry onto the next day.

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good posting

I think I'm a grammar seriall killer! See what i did there with Serial ? I normally have problems with tenses,spelling and capitalization (i capitalize letters in the miDdle of words and stuff) and Markdown styling doesn't help either... Not even a single bit!

Hahaha I have to agree with you there. My spelling has always been my bad side. I use Microsoft then copy that writing into stackedit then change titles and do all the html editing there. Only then do i post it up on steemit

Having been on steemit for 11 days now and loving it, I continually lolkl to improve my writing skills which have never been a strong point for me....its a challenge but something with the write mindset I can improve

cheers for the tips, look forward to many more will follow @livethedream0208

Thank you. I hope you will continue to love steemit as much as I have for this past year and good luck.

Thank you soo much for sharing.My grammar is very bad and now i'm learning much from your posts.

Keep posting helpful stuff.

What I find really helpful is reading the sentence out loud. It may look correct on paper but once it's read out loud you can hear it's grammatically incorrect.

Yes, I do this often when I edit my writing (when I don't feel so lazy) and it is something that always helps me.

Another good article. Thanks for sharing these. :)

Thank you for your comment. I am planning to retire at the age of 22.

That's nice. Good for you.

How many years old are you now? @dragonslayer109

I am only 19 now. I will be 20 in July

It is great so many young people are in here...I am trying to get my nephew to join...great job on your post it is helpful.

It is crazy how much I have grown on this platform (self improvement that is)

me too and I am just getting cranked up lol.. I am following you now.. what are you going to do when you retire

Study more and travel a bit then get back and start working as I don't think it would be possible for me not to work.

Thank you. Usefull info.

Thanks for the tips on managing tense while writing. Also - I love your idea of physical fitness linked to amount of $$$. Great, Upvoted !

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Thank you for your comment and I will have a look at them :)

Do you believe the actual education system does not prepare us enough to use language appropriately ? Thanks in advance

No I have never been taught anything, which I have posted about, in and lower or higher grade education. Only in studying have I been taught these things.

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