I like some interesting concepts you started here. I want to know more about what a First and a Deliverer are, and curious about these Elders. Grabbing a reader's curiosity is key, nice job with that.

I think you'd enjoy making your pieces even stronger by joining an editing process. I hope you'll consider visiting the block and trying out our fiction workshop by putting your next fiction piece in the editing queue.

And yeah, quite the crypto crash to wake up to today. Guess its all the scary talk on global regulation. This was a good distraction. I'll be looking forward to the shipwreck challenge!