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RE: Word Poetry Challenge No. 10 : Smile.
This is bloody excellent!
For too long she smiled by halves
Her joy was halved as well
She got her power back and swore
Never again to quell.
Lovely Ballad Meter, good rhythm and rhyme scheme ... force-multiplying a powerful insight. A combination of two off-setting emotions, humor and poignance ... like "sweet and sour" ... that creates "tension/release."
Damn ... this is damned fine craft.
Note to Curators ... UPVOTE this Post at 100%!!! This was more difficult to write than it appears ... which is the hallmark of good poetry. I see @sunravelme already did ... good curation.
Quill
Oh Quil,
You make me blush! Some genius just taught a word monkey to sing an advertising jingle and then self project their tiny insular perspective /existence into the formula.
Then said teacher quietly basks in the secondary gain of the students achievement. The humble satisfaction that only great teachers understand, the satisfaction of a student who listens, learns and adequately applies the lesson learned.
Inadvertently reminding and motivating the student back towards the current task. Set some time ago... quite some time ago! And lost in a sea of half written ballads and interesting words, somewhere on fire hazard kindling in the kitchen ... Marino... Counting sheep just isn't what it used to be.
@girlbeforemirror,
No one else knows what you're talking about but I can assure them, you are a very clever gal. In fact, you're so clever that your cleverness inspired your teacher to himself write a poem ... also entitled, "Smile" ... thereby increasing your competition. :-)
Steel sharpens steel.
Marg, I am furiously proud of this work. As I keep telling you ... write! This is your forte.
Quill