RE: 1st 10-Days' Report about Social Media - Growth and Engagement for Actifit App
This was a fascinating post for me, both for its own content, and because I know you'll be doing similar work for us at Utopian, and can't wait for the great results.
That said, the post had some fairly significant issues of style and grammar. Nothing that made it significantly harder to read and understand, but enough for the reading to be less enjoyable and fun than it should have been. If you like, I can provide some examples in a follow-up comment.
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Thank you for your review @didic!
I would like to have your feedback about specific points that I could improve.
I will have to try harder to find more time at the end of the posts for a cross - check and for proof reading. (If I keep saying that, maybe the universe will make it happen :P)
Happy to do so!
This is all one sentence. It should be two or three sentences. Plus, there are a couple of redundant uses of "the." The following is a very imperfect edit:
As explained thoroughly in my previous post, I am a member and a moderator for Actifit App. Together with the founder and the marketing team, we decided to start expanding awareness about the open source fitness dApp to traditional social media channels.
Another redundant "the."
"find ways to" would have been preferable. Which would allow you, in the following bullet points, to change tenses: "increasing" to "increase", and so on.
This could would work better as:
"We also wish to examine what users will react to, what will be more interesting and engaging to them."
Again, an imperfect edit. But clearer.
Thank you so much for the time you spent to share your kind corrections :)
I will take them under consideration for my next post!
Thank you for your review, @didic! Keep up the good work!