RE: Reviewing Steem Dapps, contribution of steem-activity, what is your greatest benefit and what we would like to see in the future
On the content side, this is much better than your previous contribution, with meaningful editorial content and your own experience brought into the mix. That's great.
The presentation side is a different story. While your post is well illustrated, the writing is convoluted, rife with issues of style and grammar, and genuinely hard to read at times. There is not enough punctuation, as well as misuse of punctuation. You don't capitalize the project's name, which was very confusing for me at first.
I would be happy to provide some examples of these issues in a follow-up comment, if you wish. I would also recommend putting your texts through tools such as Hemingway to see some of the problem areas and work on them.
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Would be very grateful to see the examples, the intention is to improve every time
I'm always happy when people want to see the examples and improve. It's an excellent sign for the future. And now, examples!
This is your first paragraph, which is also your first sentence. My first tip to writers is almost always: Short sentences are easier to read. So "Greetings to my dear Steemians" is a sentence. It should end with a period. The rest is one long sentence that... doesn't really make sense? I'm going to try an re-assemble it.
Is that what you meant by that sentence? If it is, that'll all you need there.
This is your second paragraph which is also one giant sentence. When you write, imagine this: For the length of a sentence, people can't breath. Maybe a small breath for a comma. But the period is where they can truly breath again. You've already established in the previous paragraph that you're sure people are aware of these apps, so there's no need to restate that in the second paragraph. I'm going to try and do an edit:
Note that I moved "develop" a bit later, as you're not developing stats. You can see them and use them to develop strategies.
These are the issues in your first two sentences. Similar issues repeat throughout the text.
Thanks for the explanation. I understand the problem very well. I will try to improve it and use Hemingway to see that such.
Thank you
Thank you for your review, @didic! Keep up the good work!