Four days to prove that my neighbor is an alien -Short Science Fiction Story-

Something strange was happening. Nick was completely sure of that, he could bet all his superhero action figures that his neighborhood was hiding something.

When Nick put his valued action figures into play that implied that the thing was serious. Very serious.

About two years ago his neighbor had decided to live on the sidewalk in front, Nicky was nine years old at the time, when he saw him for the first time, he felt a bad vibration in Theo, his neighbor in his twenty years old.

Nicky considered himself as a man, after all since his father left he became the man of the house and had to defend her from strange, evil neighbors.

Theo was loved by the whole community, he was so nice, too nice to be an ordinary human being. He didn't care if the kids stepped on his plants, in two years Nicky had never seen him angry.

Two years!

Another proof of the weird and unnatural of him.

"Still watching Theo?" - The voice of his mother took him out of his daydream and to turn a side his eyes from his binoculars with which he had been watching Theo cutting the grass for thirty minutes.

He did it perfectly. Another proof of the fact that he wasn't human.

"I'm taking my last chance to bring him to light" - Said Nicky decided turning his attention to his binoculars.

"Honey you should leave Theo in peace even if he's in his last days, we have to thank him for not reporting you for harassment or something like that" - The reproach in his voice was evident, Nick only ignored him, after all in recent years, everyone has ignored their very elaborate hypothesis about Theo.

"He moves in four days, who knows what evil plan will have in mind with the information collected in the last two years" - He turned to face his mother again and surprise, was no longer there.

Typical, being ignored since immemorial times.

He continued his vigilance when Theo raised his head to him and salute him happily with one of his hands. Nick quickly hid, crouching down so as not to be seen through the window.

Damn it .

He was discovered.

Undoubtedly he was the disgrace of the whole body of investigation of anomalies. Integrated research body, founded and financed by him.

He had to be quick before Theo left, he had to do something extreme, use all his resources and if possible risk his life if it guaranteed that the world knew the truth.

Nick was a little exaggerated to be eleven years old. His mother called him paranoia, he considered it a precaution with a high dose of compromise with humanity.

Who knows, maybe Theo comes from another planet and plans to invade the earth. The possibilities were endless, that was for sure.

Returning to his mission, he had to do something, so he would do what he had been warned countless times not to do.

Breaking and entering. Or in more basic terms, sneak into his neighbor's house.

He had everything ready. Strings, weaponry in case of defense that was summed up in his baseball bat and a camera he borrowed from his mother for the taking of evidence.

He would be unstoppable.

Determined he carefully approached to the Theo's house, making sure not to be seen by any neighbor. Slow, careful and alert.

A shame that stumbled with some old cans of paint stacked in the back door of the house of Theo causing a big scandal and alerting the dog of Mr. Brinz, the neighbor next door.

That wasn't the worst.

"Are you okay Nicky?" - Theo appeared by the door with a worried face without showing amazement to find a child rummaging in his backyard.

"It's Nick" - The disdain in his voice didn't even cause a grimace on Theo's face, just a ridiculous smile of acceptance.

"Wait a second here, I'll be right back" - Theo as he appeared disappeared behind the door leaving Nicky curious.

Was there the possibility that he called the police? That would get him in trouble with his mother, just thinking about it made him shiver.

Theo returned seconds later with a box in his arms.

"I found this while packing, I thought about throwing them away, maybe you want to keep them" - He extended the box so he could see its contents.

Nick reluctantly took it and when he saw its contents he felt that he would faint at any moment. The box was full of comics, all perfectly preserved in individual plastics.

Given by your enemy.

"You can keep them if you want" - Theo repeated with that pleasant smile that characterized him.

Well, maybe Theo to the end wasn't a bad boy, just someone nice and that's it.

"Thanks ... And apologize for spying on you" - Under the look to make himself look embarrassed.

"Don't worry about it"

Nick nodded and hugged the box tightly left running to his house.

Theo only drew a smile at the emotion emanating from his young neighbor while he entered to his house.

The house was covered with boxes wrapped and ready for the move.

"That entertained you so much" - A voice interrupted his thoughts, the person who spoke to him was sitting in one of the armchairs wrapped in plastic.

"A small inconvenience that I have already solved" - He sat down in front of his guest on the small coffee table.

"So we continue with our meeting?"

"Sure ... Well, as I was telling you before being interrupted, I think the earth will be a perfect place to establish our race, we'll just have to eliminate humans"

Yes... Maybe Nicky wasn't as wrong as everyone thought.

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That was an interesting story with a nice ending. It was a good twist at the end, worthy of any TV thriller.

You need to work a little on proof-reading your text. The hero's name is Nick or Nicky? You used both at the beginning.

Then this paragraph could do with being a lot clearer.

  • "About two years ago his neighbor had decided to live on the sidewalk in front, Nicky was nine years old at the time, when he saw him for the first time, he felt a bad vibration in Theo, his neighbor in his twenty years old."

Then this paragraph could be improved:

  • "Nick was a little exaggerated to be eleven years old. His mother called him paranoia, he considered it a precaution with a high dose of compromise with humanity."

I got a little lost in some other places too, for example

  • "and had to defend her from strange, evil neighbors."

You had not introduced who "her" is yet. later I see it is his mother, but it's not clear at that point.

I think you would have corrected many little things or made them clearer, with a bit of proof reading.

Good luck with your future writing. Your imagination is good.

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