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RE: The story in series: Chapter Two

in #thestoryinseries7 years ago (edited)

WHOEVER CHOOSES TO ENTER WILL TAP INTO AN UNIMAGINABLE POWER

As Marcus sits on the porch and ponders the meaning of the satyr and everything else that had just happened, he slowly becomes aware of the thoughts of his family in the house. First he hears the inner monologue of Anthony - then his consciousness expands farther and he becomes aware of his parents as they are embroiled in an argument. This is the last straw and he snaps, throwing his phone into the tall grass and running off to a private place he has been going to since he was a young boy when he needs some place to decompress. He regrets throwing his phone. What is happening to me? He wonders. He feels strange. He doesn't feel like himself. Who am I? He wonders.

Cut to the Sorros house where an expedition is being outfitted with spelunking gear. George Sorros is grilling his daughter and she sticks to the same story, repeating the events of Chapter 1 as she experienced them. Mr. Sorros is growing more and more imaginative as he describes what he is going to do to the entire Stavreau family but ESPECIALLY that little shit Marcus.

Zoe leads her father's men into the cave to the drop off. After setting up climbing ropes two men rappel down and find Marcus' dead body at the bottom of the drop off. He appears to have been dead for at least a day. They find Zoe's phone a few feet away from Marcus. A confused Zoe asks if they see a stanchion. Yes, they hold one up and point their lights at several more. You know they used to bill this cave as a tourist attraction, right? One of her father's men yells up. The other sweeps his light across the gypsum crystals that cover the cavern wall, cauliflower formations and dense clusters of needles. No bones, no passage to a metal door. Broken neck, yells one of the men as he prods at Marcus with his foot. Even from this distance Zoe can see the unnatural angle that Marcus' head is facing.

Marcus' dead body is transported to the Sorros home. Zoe is beyond confused at this point and has dissolved into rage. Not having anyone else to direct it at she explodes at her father when she realizes he is not planning to return the body to the Stavreaus nor inform the authorities. Her father coldly sends her to her room as he calls his lawyer. Zoe climbs out the window and runs off into the night.

End chapter 3.

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Okay time to test out my fancy new demonic vote trail. I call upon the dark powers to support my comment!

hahaha bring it on,,dark lord

I don't think it worked, Carl...

hahaha....the empire has fallen

It worked, but my army of demons just has a measly $.01 upvote between the five of them. So I guess if you mean "worked" as in gave me enough upvotes to win the comment game, then no. Really I just wanted to test the vote trail I set up and that DID work - I just had to log in as @beelzebub and upvote once and the rest of my demons trailed along after @beelzebub as intended ;)

Well then our course is clear! We need to increase the voting power of your army and make them a force to reckoned! Steemit will tremble and comments' rewards will soar when this army is called upon! All five of them! 😜

Fantastic!! Marcus is dead??? Then who the hell was that guy at the end of this chapter?? Brilliant! Thank you my friend! Now all you have to do is get it upvoted! 😁

Well obviously if my suggestion ends up being the winner, it will be up to future readers to decide. I was personally envisioning Marcus as becoming a cross between Jesus returned from the dead and Professor Xavier. A messianic Xman kinda thing. I figured if time travel had already been introduced there was absolutely no reason we couldn't be dealing with some kind of split reality here where Marcus is both demonstrably dead and also quite obviously living

OH! MY! GOD! You're killing me! You're absolutely killing me! What else are you going to think of?

Well of course the split reality is just a symptom of the rift in the fabric of spacetime caused by Marcus' latent superpowers activating upon his death. Soon the dark things from beyond space and time will begin coming into the world and the petty squabbles between neighbors and even the tyranny of an oppressive government will become afterthoughts in the fight for humanity's survival.

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