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RE: UNPROVEN Chapter Nine "The Big O"

in #story7 years ago

I agree with @jedau, the use of spacers to separate the scenes that flip POV is better. I read it after they were added, and i didn't notice any jarring with the head hopping - and normally that can throw a story for me.

This is not my usual reading material, but you've made it an easy enough read, as it is well written.

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Yeah, his tips are generally useful, this one was great ;)

Haha! I imagine it isn't, it's also not my usual writing material- thanks for the compliment!

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