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RE: UNPROVEN Chapter Nine "The Big O"
I agree with @jedau, the use of spacers to separate the scenes that flip POV is better. I read it after they were added, and i didn't notice any jarring with the head hopping - and normally that can throw a story for me.
This is not my usual reading material, but you've made it an easy enough read, as it is well written.
Yeah, his tips are generally useful, this one was great ;)
Haha! I imagine it isn't, it's also not my usual writing material- thanks for the compliment!