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RE: A Dog Dies In This Story
Never heard of that. I'll check it out. Well the non-paragraphs are part of the insanity of this character. He is obviously not stable and does not know how to speak coherently. I'm afraid paragraphs would convey an order that he, nor the town of Nada, possess.
I thought that might have been your reply. It still makes the story difficult to read, and ultimately you need to keep your readers engaged.
I hear you. My girlfriend thinks the same thing. But I cannot budge on it, even if costs me readers. I managed to put this down exactly as I envisioned it, and I cannot compromise on my vision.
I can certainly appreciate your artistic vision and your commitment to it.