You are viewing a single comment's thread from:

RE: 3:33 (Original Short Story)

in #story8 years ago

hmm...I would have narrated the story in the first person mode and then the shock of seeing himself in the bed would have more impact. Also I find first person mode of narration impacts the reader more , unless, of course, you're going to be weaving back and forth in time and space. A novel idea nonetheless :)

Sort:  

Thanks for the feedback. This is experimental writing for something that I am planning that will be a larger story.

Coin Marketplace

STEEM 0.18
TRX 0.16
JST 0.030
BTC 62226.04
ETH 2440.49
USDT 1.00
SBD 2.63