It's interesting to see if all the wild sex with Ary would change his mind. I've been thinking about it, and I thought of something cool to do for stories like this. I'm not sure if you're even considering making changes to this since you've already self-published it, but something to think about for future stories of the same nature.

Since he's in the know of something she's blind about, how about writing two separate chapters depicting the same scene from their different perspectives. On her part, Ary just feels like Grayson's bummed out because of her sadness, but in reality, it's so much deeper than that. I think the contrast plays well with that format.