Thank you very much for your pertinent comments, and I understand you liked the story, if so, I will have achieved my goal.

You are right, and in that sense, I agree with you, I need an editor or let some time pass before publishing the final version of the stories. For example, the Rebel, I wrote it this morning based on one of my previous post, entitled: The Captain. It is not a continuation, but a situation that runs parallel to the same event and obviously linked.

I am starting a new facet in my life as a storyteller, and criticisms like yours are greatly valued. The best parts of my learning, I have achieved in a self-taught way, analyzing, and applying how well others do. So, I will take your recommendations very seriously, I will read your writings regularly to learn through your works.

Thanks.