nice work @zacarnarchy143...good imagery, good character building with respect to Caleb. A suggestion, make sure to get a white space in between each paragraph to break up visually and to help readers get a rhythm as they go along.
nice work @zacarnarchy143...good imagery, good character building with respect to Caleb. A suggestion, make sure to get a white space in between each paragraph to break up visually and to help readers get a rhythm as they go along.
Thank you very much. I was definitely aiming to keep it a bit shorter than my last few, so a lot of the other characters had get noises to the wayside. I appreciate the feesback. I'm trying to find a good balance as one of my irl readers says I always have too much white space! But I'm realizing now that was more in relation to the character dialogue.
Again thank you and I always appreciate your feedback. :)