Hi, I read your story and liked it! I want to invite you to the fiction-trail. We try to encourage great content creation on Steemit by building a community of fiction writers. On the fiction-trail discussion group, you can meet other writers, get feedback on your work, and help others improve their skills.

I'm going to post your story there for others to vote and comment on, I hope it helps, and please join us for discussion and lots of great fiction.