The build up was not easy coming as i had to trim some scenes, and limit otherwise more revealing descriptions.
The drunk could have, for instance, started off from the bar where i had pictured him and fellow drunkards discussing the sermon of the day (that had been given by the Reverend)
The scene involving the Reverend could have started with him in deep prayer at midnight, before the drunk would interrupt.
The scene of the youngsters could have started with them breaching the fence....
Overall,
The cemetery could have had a much deeper description to create that scary atmosphere ...
Overall, i could have done more, but the 300-word ceiling made it somewhat hard, albeit ensuring that only the most important scenes and descriptions came to the fore.
More could have probably been done, including constructing the story from the angle @swissclive has suggested above, but i am glad you still find this build up great. thanks
The build up was not easy coming as i had to trim some scenes, and limit otherwise more revealing descriptions.
Overall,
Overall, i could have done more, but the 300-word ceiling made it somewhat hard, albeit ensuring that only the most important scenes and descriptions came to the fore.
More could have probably been done, including constructing the story from the angle @swissclive has suggested above, but i am glad you still find this build up great. thanks