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RE: A short story - Judgement Day
290 word count is correct. A nice funny story. Well written. Maybe it would be more plausible if the two in the graveyard were not youngsters. On the other hand, the old drunk tramp at the door Could have been a scared youngster. Why not swap drunks for youngsters? It shortens the story leaving room to increase the tension and fear.
Hahaha...I agree. That would have probably been a more interesting angle. Thanks for the perception.