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RE: Costly Mistake.

in #story-300words7 years ago (edited)

Your story poses an interesting moral dilemma. Larry is certainly thrust into the middle ground where either choice made will leave one side hurt.

The narration however needs some improvement. I suggest you mind the following

  1. your use of tenses (present, present continuous, and past...). For example [(a. present)..life has been difficult for him...((b. past)...She came across him by the ...)].

  2. Also mind the spelling and punctuation. This may seem trivial, but they can inconvenience the reading of an otherwise good story

Cheers my friend.

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Thanks for the observation. Noted.

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