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RE: Kindness is not weakness

Besides a few grammar/punctuation errors, which i suggest you pay attention to in the future, as such can make understanding even the finest writing difficult.

But overall, the story has a good moral.

I here suggest a few corrections, in parenthesis. I hope they help.

They both attends (attend) one of the best school (s) on (in) town, (:) covenant high.

They stays (stay) in the same hostel.

the evil has done to peter's mom. (you might need to revise this to make easier to understand)

Finally the boy gave up and ask (asked) his father, he said:

I hope these corrections can help improve your story, which is by the way nice. It brings to perspective the habit of most student, until it becomes as unfortunate as it did for Peter!

Thanks for sharing

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Thanks so much i really appreciate

The honor is mine. Thanks

Thanks for helping this steemian improve his English.

The honor is mine. Many individuals have shown interest in this 300 word listing, but i notice a significant number struggles with grammar. But then then that is where the commentary should come handy.

To offer suggestions for corrections.

Literary work, stories, poems, narratives....is like a mirror, with many reflections, many perspectives....

I often expect that when one reads a story/poem, he/she should be able to resonate with the experience of the characters or the theme respectively.

I find those who offer alternatives, who share in the experience and discuss the characters or the theme, more engaging. It is they, i have no question, who add value to the pleasure of writing and being read.

To quote Samuel Johnson — 'A writer only begins a book. A reader finishes it.'

Otherwise thanks again for the engagement you have enebled in this story-300words offer.

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