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RE: IN MY COUNTRY | Day 55

in #steemitschoolpoetry6 years ago (edited)

"In my country" is a poem composed of six stanzas of free verse and one last loose verse.
It raises the difficult social insertion of the Nigerian citizen in his own country.
Each beginning of verse reinforces the situation of helplessness and loneliness present in the country for the people who live there, through the motto: "He is alone in my country."
The lyrical voice is identified with the country of origin, manifesting the national identity with the continuous expression: "my country".
The complaint is a constant throughout the poem.
There is a complaint about the "redefinition" of young people, due to the poor function assumed by older people that, it is supposed, should be an example of strength and direction, but they do not. In the same way, falsehood, immorality and inequality are criticized.
However, in the last stanza it adds to the long list of discomforts, the loss of democracy and the possible flight of talent or the limited role of the most studied, lawyers, scientists.
It caught my attention, the expression:

the sacred voices are filmed and sealed to the last point.

From my point of view, it seems that it is more coherent: Signed and sealed instead of filmed and sealed. It could be cultural distance or translator error. But, it caught my attention because as it is written, distances my understanding.
In general, it is a good protest poem that achieves its purpose. When reading the strength of that lyric speaker giving warning voices about the current decadent situation in his country.
Good job, fellow poet! I congratulate your creative art!

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