First and foremost, slide your tongue in when you jump bro!.
The rhymes in your poem are superb and it makes me feel simplicity is a mantra you love to employ. Your poem makes it seem that age is not thing and time is just an illusion? Did I say it makes it seem? Nah! It makes me believe! I see this piece getting out there and pricking the avaricious hearts like a needle.
I admire your sonnet sir!