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How I ended up here,
Only I won't schmooze
Those without souls.
Give me images, dreams,
Let your touch bleed
Raw to my screen,
Bare truths and stark passions
Wounds, worries, elations,
It's these I need,
These stark naked confessions
That plump up my tummy
And fatten my feathers.
Look, look!
See, see!
My mouth is wide open
But I can eat nothing at all,
Save faith, truth and freedom,
Save faith, truth and freedom.
seronegative arthritis.
(https://steemit.com/@girlwithoutwings)
awesome
Ah thank you! I've only just joined and was a bit horrified at the schmoozing lol. Keeping it real! 😀
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STOPThis is great. I think the word, schmoozing, fits well with the content of your poem. I think the purpose of manipulating the language in poetry is to end with words that represent a more complete notion of the thought you're trying to convey. If the common word works, there's no need to change it.
This piece gets me exited for things to come. Somehow, I wasn't following you. I thought I did so on your intro post. Well, I am now, so keep in touch. Also, try tagging with #onehumanbasket. There's a groups of poets that look under that tag (I do).
Ooh brill! Yes I will do that. Thank you so much. I had a great Skype session with a Canadian storyteller who told me that anglo words are always more powerful/active than latin. I know schmooze is neither I suppose - but her tip changed the way I approached my writing. Previously I think I'd been afraid of more common words. Thanks for all the tips. I'm lapping up the good stuff - it's pure fuel!