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RE: A SHORT STORY: Overpopulation in Antares
This is such a good story, technically the prompt was supposed to be in the title or opening line, but you did include it, just for next time :)
I love that this isn't at all about people. The world you create is immersive, you can believe this is the world of ants. I particularly liked the sensibilities of the leader, making the choice that would ensure the survival of the colony at the cost of some of the members. A difficult choice, that could have paid off, I liked that it didn't matter in the end though, as nature intervened. A story which shows a depth of skill and imagination, hope to see another entry in the next round :)
@calluna - Thank you for gentle and kind critique. Yes, that is indeed a fuax pas of note! I guess I stubbornly ran with the ending in mind :(
I'm not a regular writer but I took up the challenge to see if there was a way to relate some of the issues of overpopulation to a child.
Thank you for an excellent contest. :)