RE: RAP CHALLENGE WEEK #16 SUBMISSION THREAD! - SUBMIT YOUR VIDEOS AND WIN SBD!
I recommend headphones for this one, full lyrics are provided below so you can read or rap along. I appreciate you all for listening and reading my lyrics.
Verse 1:
Life is crazy, you're not tryna hear our struggle bars
Too vicious if unleashed, getting muzzled hard
Rottweilers at the front of our junkyards
Subconsciousness is guarding scattered memories we tugged apart...
No entry is allowed, so if you're trespassing
Some'll end up on the news, due to death, passing
Elites love us when we die; we ingest habits
Bodies on the streets are speed bumps, but there's less traffic...
The hate is real from the fakes that create facades
Ready to react like an act that awaits applaud
Thinking that they're slick, yet they twitch giving clever nods
I make 'em cringe with jaw unhinged mentioning my God
This world disowns me, impressed by their possessions
Possessed by their oppressions still obsessed with their succession
I test the spirits, their intentions never in a session
Protected from the weapons formed against me, Christ reflection...
Song Lyrics Copyrighted By @Verbal-D
Very Dope, Powerful sermon! I'll be back next week.
Thank you for your humbling words. I look forward to your next sharp high level entry
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I hope you become a regular visitor here to the #rapchallenge
Dropping knowledge brehhhh
You're not ready for the booth though haha jk
I know you stay on it
Thank you bro,
I gotta check up on our next project
Appreciate you listening on this one
You already know how it is...
The booth isn't going anywhere, but we are
YAH-WEHHHHH
WE OUT HERE VERBBBBB
HOLDING IT DOWN FOR THE KINGDOM
SNOW, RAIN OR SHINE
COLD HATE OR GRIME...
Indeed indeed bro
Much gratitude
I'm not tryna do it ya'll way
I do it all for Yah-weh
Can't stop, won't stop
Remember, don't sleep or slip up!
This was heavy
Verbal got the sermons
Keep blessing the mic bro
We should release our collab soon, it's ready to go
Thank you for your kind words bro
Trying to inspire one another for the bigger picture
Yeah don't worry, I will plan it for a release either next week or the week after
I gotta see what's up with the organization
now that's what i call BARS!!!
You honor me highly bro, I am humbled, gotta keep my pen sharp
I can get dull at any moment the moment I let up!
Much gratitude bro, now I gotta see what I'mma write up for the MC Challenge 4 by @termitemusic and check out got16s, lol too many things to do on Steemit
It is always refreshing
lol i feel the same way, i love these rap challenges, like you said it keeps the pen sharp! So you're the vice president of adsactly? Do you think i got what it takes to get signed?
Yeah it definitely keeps the pen sharp, and yes I'm the Vice President of @AdsactlyRecords I feel you still have a lot of improvements to make in terms of overall presentation, performance and personal growth. That is based on everything that I have seen, heard and observed so far. I believe you have to apply more pressure to yourself and put forth more energy, ride the beat with a steady flow, and script your rhymes where you have breathing room in between your phrases.
The content of your rhymes also are very creative at times, but can slide into predictability or just needs to be re-worded with a bit more intricacy, simplicity isn't always a bad thing, but it causes dry spots in tightly knitted verses probably cause you're just having fun with it, but your main focus should be on your delivery, performance and flow, and sometimes a sloppy or offbeat performance can hurt your entries from winning top 3 in this rap challenge. How you say something is more important than what you say, when it comes to and applies to the musical quality sound of your emceeing, but of course what you write is just near as important which is directed at who your audience is. So if you know your audience, and know the value and intention of your song, then you can see how you stand apart from the rest of other musicians in a unique facet of your own.
The writing is there for the most part, but you gotta have hunger, as well as what we call, controlled passion, so your rhymes come off clear with believable conviction.
There is a lot you can learn and improve upon bro. I give you my honest opinion because you asked. I hope what I have written helps you to strengthen those areas. You're growing everyday with all of us as we each improve upon our shortcomings. If you have any polished professional tracks or music videos that you think would showcase your overall ability, definitely send them over to @rondonson or link them to me if he isn't able to respond in a timely manner.
Thanks 4 your constructive criticism bro, i'll work on the things you mentioned. I know i have some growing to do as an artist and thank you again for the advice and honesty. One love brother!
I agree with his input. I've seen you write some master pieces but delivery, you got to stay on beat and not let the beat make you chase it. If you stay on top of the rhythm with the beat, you'll be fixing a lot of what needs to be worked on. Have fun though, and that's something you always do.
thanks for the advice, im'a work on my delivery 4 sure, the people has spoken! lol
You're most welcome bro. One love indeed. Anytime
"This world disowns me, impressed by their possessions\ Possessed by their oppressions still obsessed with their succession" powerful stuff!! nice1
Thank you very much bro, I appreciate you shouting out a couple of lines that resonated with you
you're welcome brother
Very Dope, Powerful sermon! I'll be back next week.