Yea man, this was really cool. I always dig the tracks that really come from the heart.
Only critique with this would be that you are doing it for the rap challenge, and you have to keep it 1 minute or under my man. I would suggest you re-title this and then make another one for the challenge so you can be eligible
yeah man , I hear you, thats probably best. I tried to keep this short but it got away on me!! haha , will write something else now