ROSE AND THORN:MYSTERY OF A WOMAN UNTOLD

in #poetsunited7 years ago (edited)

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So soft a woman, like petals of a rose 🌹,
She blooms in the springtime of man's life,
And beckons gently to his nose,
The strongest or the meekest man...
To take her hand, a sweet bouquet,
The htorns are there, she sometimes shows,
To prick their souls, the men she knows,
So savoring the warmth that grows...
A woman, sweet but thorny rose 🌹,
With a fragrance justly sweet,
Of many colors to persuade,
He brushes the petals to his face...
He dreams of how she may be his,
He takes her hand in a sweet sweet bouquet,
He reaches and possess the prize,
He tastes her kiss so softly and sweet,
Too often late to realize,
The thorns that surrounds her rose🌹.

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Hey @cheryl,
this is so beautiful. Infact one of the best poetry I have seen in a while.
MY BEST LINES:

He tastes her kiss 😘 so softly and sweet,
Too often late to realize,
The torns that surrounds her rose🌹


You have a deep personality!
Keep steeming!
Cheers!

Thank you so much Boss.

Quite compelling and superb. This poem tends to highlights the beauty and nature of a promising woman in a man's life while exposing her mild weaknesses.
Beautiful piece, well done.

WOW @cheryldavis that was something, nicely put together. My vocabulary is so poor comparing with your's. O teach me master of word's and thought's, how to sing a song of my soul... Great post, just keep writing.

Lol, thanks friend but am still learning tho

A very lovely piece.

@cherlydavis,

Lovely poem!

I take it this poem is autobiographically inspired! :-)

Too often late to realize,
The thorns that surrounds her rose

The great Insight-After-The-Fact of Men throughout history. :-) But then again, that's what makes it interesting.

This is a well-written poem, @cheryldavis! In my opinion, using the emojis detracts from it, and makes it look childish, which it is not. They definitely don't do anything to enhance or add to the poem. I suggest that you remove them, and bring this poem into the world of serious writing where it deserves to be.

Also, you use the word torns twice. Did you mean to say thorns? I wasn't sure if you were using creative artistic license here, or it was a spelling error. Either one works, in this case, but torns is not an actual word in English.

Cheers!

Point noted. Thank you

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