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RE: Poetry Dice Challenge Week 31: The Warm Whisper of A Heart that Loves
I like this, if I may, it might be worth reading it outloud a few times. Towards the end I suspect (might be wrong) a comma in two places might aid the rhythm as there are natural pauses after heart beat and feeling thanks for sharing ;o)
Ahh... Thanks for the suggestion! It'll make it better that way... But instead of after the word feeling, I think the pause would be better before it.. Thank you.. I'll edit it. I'm glad you like it... ヽ(^o^)丿
Pleasure ;-)