You are viewing a single comment's thread from:
RE: DO YOU KNOW OF DEATH - A POEM
This is a great piece. Really sad and pained.
I'm not much of a poet but a broken clock is right twice a day.
So here is my take.
I think you could have used other synonyms of fear and wet. Maybe you were going for alliteration, ionno .
Anyway, my thoughts 😃. Have a great one.
It was more about juxtaposing cold and rumpled sheets with wet pillows warm with wet cheeks.
We expect pain to be cold, empty but it can also be warm and wet.
The truth though is I do not think of poetic devices when I write. I let the words speak to me and if they say what I consider to be true, I put it down.
BTW, I like to use words that tell the thing as it is. I don't really like sanitized words.