Darkness Calls, a poem about loss.

in #poetry7 years ago


The dreaded phone call, after midnight tolls,
no good comes from that plastic portent machine when day has passed.
Frantic messages about loved ones lost
Taxi journeys to places filled with sorrow,
thinking magical thoughts, if i don’t believe, it can’t be so...

Night black buildings pass in a blur, tears choked back and bright glassy chat with a cheery driver.
The world, indifferent to a families shared plight,
eyes bright and brittle soaked with unshed tears, time a plenty for that later.

Then later comes in a melee of grief and sandwiches and handshakes,
sorrow and sympathy spooned down the grief raw throat.
Melancholy memories of happier days long past and silent episodes between visits.
Dull half remembered talk of place and people now lost to time and sad bitter reflection

A box, a suit, a man. No life to stir the still hand.
A keening sorrow.
A mass, a time to think, to wish for a different day,
then a box lifted in the air by stooping, shaking shoulders.
A walk, the terror of a stumble and then it's all done.
A life ended and a time and place fled to memory and bittersweet recollection.

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Wow!
What a beautiful poem. It reminds me of my loss last year (My father)
Very passionate poem.
Thanks for sharing

...and please do keep in touch.

Resteemed!

Thanks for following and your kind comment on my poem. Your piece is pretty damned great, as well, and I am so sorry for your deep loss, which you expressed beautifully. Nice to meet you here and hope to see and share more.

Thanks and please stay in touch

It struck me as poignant and beautiful in a bittersweet way. I could tell there was a paradoxical feeling of numbness mixed with clarity. All in all it captured the emotions of grief, shock, depression, and acceptance well. I love how you used a combination of short and long phrases for contrast. I also appreciated the contrast between the strong emotions and the plain, mechanical physical objects. I'm sorry for the loss you experienced but glad I can read your poetry.

Thank you for your very kind words. I appreciate you stopping by and having a read.

what a beautiful poem. Felt so touch.

Thank you, very kind of you to say so.

!!! I don't know how I missed reading and responding to this (you asked me to take a look on one of my posts)--this is good! I would work on editing the spacing a little and fix a couple of grammar issues, but it's really quite good!! Thanks for sending me here!

“When the girl returned, some hours later, she carried a tray, with a cup of fragrant tea steaming on it; and a plate piled up with very hot buttered toast, cut thick, very brown on both sides, with the butter running through the holes in great golden drops, like honey from the honeycomb. The smell of that buttered toast simply talked to Toad, and with no uncertain voice; talked of warm kitchens, of breakfasts on bright frosty mornings, of cosy parlour firesides on winter evenings, when one's ramble was over and slippered feet were propped on the fender, of the purring of contented cats, and the twitter of sleepy canaries.” ― Kenneth Grahame, The Wind in the Willows 🍞

can you tell me the grammar issues?

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