Your flow is beautiful... I love how you lead the reader through the relationship.
Soft and silent whispers,
showing me the way.
The tone of worship here...
As a supplicant,
I make you an offering,
in these dark streets,
full of hidden meanings.
It is an all-consuming love.
Thank you. I am glad the tone and intent of the piece have come through :)
I do find this form of poetry in particular lends itself to the flow. I'm glad I tried my hand at it.